Day Five – Emily Dickinson re-worked

Day five and I have caught up!!! We have to choose an Emily Dickinson poem and re-master it, effectively. I chose one from the website link (the original is under my version) that I had never seen before. I sort of enjoyed the process, more than I thought I would, but not sure whether I changed it very much or enough to make an appreciable difference.
I would rather…

I would not paint a picture,
I’d rather be one.
The bright impossibility to dwell delicious on,
wonder how the fingers feel,
whose rare celestial stirs so sweet a torment,
such sumptuous despair.
I would not talk, like cornets,
I’d rather be the one raised softly to the ceilings,
easy on through villages of ether:
the self-endued balloon
but a lip of metal,
the pier to my pontoon.
Would I be a poet?
It’s finer to own the ear,
enamoured yet impotent,
content to revere a privilege.
What would the dower be,
had I the art to stun
with sudden bolts of melody?
http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/247286
I would not paint — a picture — (348)

I would not paint — a picture —
I’d rather be the One
It’s bright impossibility
To dwell — delicious — on —
And wonder how the fingers feel
Whose rare — celestial — stir —
Evokes so sweet a torment —
Such sumptuous — Despair —

I would not talk, like Cornets —
I’d rather be the One
Raised softly to the Ceilings —
And out, and easy on —
Through Villages of Ether —
Myself endued Balloon
By but a lip of Metal —
The pier to my Pontoon —

Nor would I be a Poet —
It’s finer — Own the Ear —
Enamored — impotent — content —
The License to revere,
A privilege so awful
What would the Dower be,
Had I the Art to stun myself
With Bolts — of Melody!

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